Monday, 20 January 2014

Script to Screen: Idea 7 (Further Development)

With the suggestion to keep my story visually more interesting and engaging, I made the changes to my opening scene for this project. 

Idea 7: The Obsessive Artist

Character 1 Biography:
> Alvaro, a 42 year old artist
> Quiet in person but expressive in terms of his artwork
> Visits the Emerald Zoological Gardens regularly to do his paintings
> Perfectionist
> Medium Built, about 5’8” weighing 165 lbs

Character 2 Biography:
> Raul, a 38 year old zookeeper

Alvaro is seen in his studio, painting when his brush started to fail him. His brushstrokes appear to be clumsy and rough. His eyes darted immediately to the wall where there was a calendar. On one particular date, it says “National Arts Competition Dateline". The urgency to finish his artwork started to kick in. He rushes out the studio and went on to several art supplies shops in search of the perfect replacement for his paintbrush but was unsuccessful. Filled with disappointment and anger, he stomps out of Johnny’s art supply shop, which was his last hope. While he stopped at a junction, waiting to cross the road, he sees the sign to the zoo.

The way he sets up his easel in the zoo showed that he was a perfectionist. However, despite the setup, there was no actual artwork being produced. Alvaro was there to observe the animals in their enclosures very carefully for his new side project.

Every night since, Alvaro would sneak into the zoo and set up his net to lure and later, trap his victim, in search of the perfect match to recreate his paintbrush. The search of finding the perfect bristle has triggered this madness.

Meanwhile, the disappearance of the animals becomes a very serious issue that the zoo and the press worked together by publishing articles 'The Fisherman Strikes Again At Local Zoo” and a reward would be given in return. Alvaro was very determined and obsessed to find his replacement bristles that these wanted signs were not even once seen as a slightest threat to this madness nor did he realise that Raul, the zookeeper was onto him. One night, the zookeeper caught him in action and confronted him. A scuffled started, a man’s life ended. It was not known who was killed until a photo of the zookeeper splashed across the front page of the newspaper, with half of his well-groomed moustache missing. A sinister, sadistic smile was painted all over Alvaro’s face as he admires his fat new brush and a perfect painting.


  1. This sounds very cool! Alvaro is portrayed really well, he even gives me the chills!! I think there are some lines like "The search of finding the perfect bristle has triggered this madness." can be removed to give better clarity of content to the reader, maybe redo this a step outline? The story, however, really looks good, looking forward to storyboards!! Hope this helps! :D

    1. Thanks Kyle. Will take into account your feedback. :)