tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3871132611780879797.post217920665269911286..comments2023-05-27T13:10:50.440+01:00Comments on Ayunie Adiana: Script to Screen: Idea 7 RefinementAyunie Adianahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/14803086427297614704noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3871132611780879797.post-21029890635230523322014-01-19T20:40:44.398+00:002014-01-19T20:40:44.398+00:00Thanks Phil. Really appreciate the feedback and I ...Thanks Phil. Really appreciate the feedback and I think with this, my story has got better :)Ayunie Adianahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14803086427297614704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3871132611780879797.post-31357195065085198822014-01-19T19:26:33.668+00:002014-01-19T19:26:33.668+00:00Hmmm - I still don't think you have 'the&#...Hmmm - I still don't think you have 'the' ending yet. If you're determined to let your artist get away with it, why not have a zoo-keeper (with a big moustache) who becomes suspicious of the artist; in the final scene, we have a confrontation, a scuffle, a man is killed - we don't know which one; then, in the reveal at the end, we see a photo in the newspaper of the zookeeper with his moustache half-missing, and then we cut to a last shot of the artist with a fat new brush and the perfect painting...tutorphilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11842833126210822641noreply@blogger.com